In honor of National Poetry Month, here is a poem from my university creative writing days. This poem’s style imitates that of the Swampy Cree First Nation from Canada. Their poetry often described a person by his/her attributes and was written in community voice.
Who Saw Doves
–
She came to us from the shore,
pale-skinned with stringy yellow hair.
Vultures smelled sea salt
on her flesh, swooped near her ears
and crowed, We love you.
–
We told her not to believe them –
that they wanted to taste
the ocean fish in her belly –
but she could not hear us
over the beating of feathers.
–
Laughing, she climbed high into the oak
and crawled into the nest. Surrounded by vultures,
she whispered, How lovely to be a friend
of the doves.
“Who Saw Doves” was part of my collection, “Olive Branch,” which I presented at the 2013 Sigma Tau Delta Convention. It was also featured in Watershed, Baker University’s literary magazine.
This is quite good Kate! You should consider putting together an anthology of poems.
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Thank you, Zach! That’s so nice of you to say! I have thought about it before, but I don’t have too many in my arsenal right now. Might be a good future project when I get around to writing more poetry.
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You know my wife brought up a good point (because honestly I said the same thing to her when she said I should put one together) what if we gather poems from our blogger sources and put together a collection….just a thought. Email me if you’re interested.
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I think that has the potential to be a brilliant project. Let’s definitely discuss it more soon (maybe after Camp NaNoWriMo?) – lest my writer’s brain explode! lol
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Oh trust me…I’m not capable of working on too many projects at once.
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Lovely ending line.
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Thank you so much!
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Beautiful, Kate! I agree with Zach, you should consider putting together a poetry collection.
This poem is either a lesson in how to see the best in everyone or a warning, but I’d prefer the first option.
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Thank you, Ula! I’m glad you understood the duality of the poem, and I really appreciate your support.
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Love it. It’s quite beautiful and I agree that that is a powerful last line.
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Thanks, Amanda!
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Yup, that’s really good. Thank you for sharing it.
Incidentally, up here we call them Native Canadians, or, more commonly (and officially, I think), First Nations. You know, just to be nitpickety. 😉
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Thanks, Amo! And thank you for telling me the proper terminology. We use Native Americans for our indigenous people, so I just assumed it would be the same since we are all on the North American continent. I’ll update that!
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It’s a reasonable assumption. I just looked it up, and it appears that officially they’re called the Swampy Cree First Nation, or just the Swampy Cree Nation. And as I hadn’t known anything about them before looking it up, I learned something new, too! Good stuff. 🙂
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Clever and imaginative. Precise phrasing and strong sense of rhythm. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your critique. 🙂
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